Purpose: To persuade others to our point of view
L:G: Use emotive language to persuade our audience
S:O:S
- One reason
- Add detail
- Use emotive words
- Talk to the audience
Silly Pigs
Have you heard the three little pigs? Well suddenly, I’ve just discovered a different side to the story. It’s actually the pigs fault! The wolf just knocked on the door innocently, grannies are precious and the wolf's got a cold. Be nice to the poor wolf.
Firstly, the wolf just knocked on the door. It’s hardly fair to not give someone sugar. Would you feel like no one likes you? Would you not like it if you kindly ask for some sugar and you don’t get any?
Secondly, the pigs were rude enough not to say come in! (He was just getting sugar for his granny) It’s her birthday. Your grannies are really precious to you.
Thirdly, if you didn’t get any sugar for your granny you would look like an old clown. Why does everyone have to blame the friendly wolf? He’s got a cold. Be nice to him because it’s not hard to be nice. Even saying hello is nice. Who would build a house out of straw? That’s just pathetic!
So I’ve just stated my part of the story. The wolf just knocked on the door. The pigs we’re rude enough not to open the door and you’d look like clown if you couldn’t help your Grandma. Thats why you should help the wolf get free of this blame.
By Cooper Patterson
I like how you persuded me about the other side of the story.
ReplyDeleteI like how you used emotive language why its the pigs fault.
I think you could put some more puncuation.
from Jordan Petrie
room20
I like how you went back and editing.
ReplyDeleteVery good full stops.
I think you could probably use more question marks.
From Cooper
facinating i liked the part when you seid it his folt
ReplyDeleteI love your hook in,because I felt like I want to keep reading.
ReplyDeleteYou have also used emotive words.
Next time try and word you text better.
Amy Vickers Room 20
awesome job on using emotive language. and persuading the audience. next time you can write less. from Ethan
ReplyDeleteGreat job on using emotive language. And persuading me .Next time can you write less by Ethan
ReplyDeletel love the way you used emotive
ReplyDeletefrom hayley [room 14]
Hi cooper
ReplyDeleteI really like your title you made up.
I really enjoyed your hook in.
Next step: You could be more detailed in last part
From molly