Purpose: To persuade others to our point of view
L:G: Use emotive language to persuade our audience
S:O:S
- One reason
- Add detail
- Use emotive words
- Talk to the audience
It’s Only Sugar
In the story the three little pigs, the big bad wolf isn’t actually the bad guy. The three little pigs are, and i’m going to tell you why.
Firstly, the extremely trustworthy wolf accidentally blew their house down because he had a cold. He was just sneezing so much! Could you control your cold?
Secondly, all the magnificent wolf wanted was some sugar for his poor old Grandmas birthday cake. If the annoying pigs just opened the door there wouldn’t be a problem! I say that the pigs are tremendously rude.
Finally, who would make a house out of straw? That is ridiculous! Do you think thats a bit suspicious because wouldn’t they know that it is going to fall down? Would you make a house out of straw or sticks? I know you wouldn’t.
So I've just told you that the big bad wolf is not actually that bad, the three little pigs are the bad guy’s! As already stated the wolf accidentally blew their house down because he had a sneezing cold. All the wolf wanted was some sugar for his poor old grandmas birthday cake and who would make a house out of straw?
Written by Molly Gernhoefer
Room 20
You have showed me not told me how the wolf had a cold.
ReplyDeleteYou have also used emotive words.
Next time try not to repeat what your saying.
From Amy Vickers Room 20
I like how you used a lot of emotive words and WOW words.
ReplyDeletei liked how you done you learning goal to persuade your audience .
I think you should put some more puncuation.
from jordan petrie
I like how you used a lot of emotive words and WOW words.
ReplyDeletei liked how you done you learning goal to persuade your audience .
I think you should put some more puncuation.
from jordan petrie
Molly I like your tile how you said its only sugar!!
ReplyDeleteMolly I like how the three little pigs are the bad guys
Molly what you can improuve on next time is use more conjunkshons
by courtney
There is a lot of emotive words in your story.
ReplyDeleteI agree the wolf isn't the bad guy.
Next time you could use more detail in your paragraphs.
From Molly
I like how you have add detail to your story Molly.
ReplyDeleteWow how do you know all this staff and I like how you have used your one reason.
Next time you could talk to the audience a bit more.
From Hannah Watkins from Room 20.
Molly I like how you have persuaded me
ReplyDeleteMolly I like how you have added detail to your story
Molly you could talk to the audience a bit more is that ok
written by Mason Gadsby Room 20
Molly
ReplyDeleteI like the way you used detail in your story
I like the way you talked to the audience
N.S you could use emotive words
BY Bailey
I like the way you have achived your learning goal REALLY GOOD!!!
ReplyDeleteI also like the way you have Talked to Audience in every paragraphs really GOOD!!!!
Next time make your first sentence a little more exciting
from Zeta