Purpose: To persuade others to our point of view
L:G: Use emotive language to persuade our audience
S:O:S
- One reason
- Add detail
- Use emotive words
- Talk to the audience
FANTASTIC MR FOX
Mr Dombroski, I officially and positively believe that the foxes are in the wrong because he’s stealing, making the farmers ANGRIER and it’s not illegal to kill animals!!
Firstly, the foxes are in the wrong because it's not illegal to KILL Animals!!!!! How would you feel if you didn’t get any meat? Well meat might not be important to you but I think it’s healthy for me!!!
Secondly, he’s dumb to go steal their chickens, turkeys, geese and other types of food! If the three farmers see him, it will make them more ANGRY, FEISTY and be even more HARSH on the foxes!!!!!!
Lastly, it’s going to make the farmers wait, wait, wait and wait and if the FOXES are down there too long.The farmers will get sick and tired of waiting and then maybe go down the gigantic hole and find the FOXES. Then the foxes will get shot and die in the gigantic HOLE!!!!!! Don’t you think they should get killed because they’re stealing their money basically??!!
As already stated, the FOXES are in the wrong because there stealing meat, food and stuff which will make the farmers HARSH on the FOXES and the farmers will just go down the GIGANTIC HOLE and the foxes will get shot!!
By Zeta Barber
Room 20
you did your capital letters and full stops well
ReplyDeleteGood explaining your reasons in your hook in
Next time use and only once in a sentence
from Ben
Zeta I like how you have used emotive language
ReplyDeleteZeta I also like how you have used emotive words
Zeta you could persuade me more
written by Mason Gadsby
I like the way i have heaps of EMOTIVE WORDS!!!!
ReplyDeleteI like the way I have heaps of puncaition
Next time i could add a bit more detail to my paragraghs
From Zeta
I like the way I have heaps of punctiution in my story
ReplyDeleteI also like the way I have a lot of adjectives and emotive words
Next time add a bit more detail to it
From Zeta