Purpose: To persuade others to our point of view
L:G: Use emotive language to persuade our audience
S:O:S
- One reason
- Add detail
- Use emotive words
- Talk to the audience
Fantastic Mr Fox
Have you heard of the Fantastic Mr Fox? The fox is a thief. He stole Boggis, Bunce and Beans food.
Firstly, the fox is in the wrong because he stole the farmers food. So thats taking away a lot of money. How would you like it if you had no money to get food to survive?
Secondly, the farmers should kill the fox because that’s taking away something really good from the farmers. No one said that killing animals is illegal. So would you kill the fox to get food to survive?
Lastly, I think that the farmers would get really angry over the fox stealing their food. Why would you just go over there and steal their food? I wouldn’t. Would you?
I think this story is a lie. The Fantastic Mr fox isn’t so fantastic at all. The fox is absolutely outrageous for stealing all the farmers food.
Written by Jordan Petrie
Room 20
Spectacular talk detail and reason.
ReplyDeleteHeaps of detail just amazing.
When you said the fox is stealing you could of added a little more detail
From cooper
Jordan I like the way you used lots of reasons and your punctuation was in the right places one thing you could work on is putting more detail in your story .
ReplyDeletefrom your sister Adelaide:)
well done on your capital letters and full stops
ReplyDeleteI like how you have added detail
next time make a more exiting hook in
from ben
I like how you have your full stops and capital letters in the right place.
ReplyDeleteI also like the way you have heaps of detail on FANTASTIC Mr Fox
Next time make your first sentence more exciting
From Zeta