Sunday, June 14, 2015

Purpose: Describe what thunder and lightning looks like and does.
L.G: Use correct sentences that have capital letters and full stops.
Lightning
LIGHTING! LIGHTNING! LIGHTING! BANG! BOOM! BANG! There goes the lighting so violent. The lightning sizzles in the bright night sky then turns into wonderful colorful fireworks and disappears. It goes again and sparks so bright. It’s like a root of a tree at the very top and down to the bottom and at the bottom it looks like a fork. Lightning lights up the town so bright then burns poles, roofs and drains. STRIKE! STRIKE! It’s striking everything. It’s knocking things over. It electrocutes things, burns them and makes fire as well. LIGHTNING! LIGHTNING! LIGHTNING! It goes again one hundred times.

By Zeta Barber 
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7 comments:

  1. AnonymousJune 21, 2015 at 3:46 PM

    I like how you used lots of capitals.
    I Like how you used lots of full stops.
    Next time you could use some more describing words

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  2. AnonymousJune 21, 2015 at 3:48 PM

    I like how you used lots of capital letters.
    I like how you used lots of full stops.
    Next time you could use more describing words

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  3. AnonymousJune 22, 2015 at 3:19 PM

    I like how you have hooked me in at the start
    and how you used precise language, but I think you could work using different sentence starters.

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  4. AnonymousJune 22, 2015 at 3:52 PM

    I really like your hook in when it says LIGHTNING! LIGHTNING! LIGHTNING! BANG! BOOM! BANG!
    well done. You have put your fell stops and capital letters in the right place.
    Next time don't put in "It goes one hundred times.
    By Sarah and R20.

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  5. AnonymousJune 23, 2015 at 12:06 AM

    Wow Zeta I can really see the picture in my head
    Good capital letters and full stops.
    Next time you could say something about the thunder
    From Cooper

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  6. AnonymousJune 23, 2015 at 11:06 PM

    Wow i love you hook in.
    You have used capital letters and fullstops.
    Next time you could add more WOW WORDS.
    From Amy Vickers Room20

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  7. AnonymousAugust 9, 2015 at 3:31 PM

    I like how you told the audiunce what thunder and lightning actullaly what it does.
    I like it how you followed your learning goal and used correct sentences and full stops.
    I think you should do some more WOW WORDS to make your story more exciting.
    from, Jordan Petrie room 20

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