Thunder and lightning comes to town
Thunder and lightning is the lightest and loudest type
of weather. Some lightning looks like a fork when it breaks up. Some of the
lightning would be blue and sharp. Some would look like dust or a spark or a
crack. The thunder scares all the cats inside. It can make fire and knock trees
down. Have you ever seen thunder and lightning?
By
Mason Gadsby
Mason I like how you used explaining words like cats run into houses.I like how you explained the lightning.next time You need to add more story to your piece
ReplyDeleteFrom cooper
I like how you have done a lot of wow words in there
ReplyDeleteGreat work of remembering to put full stops and capital letters
next time try and put more detail in it
From Sarah
Room 20
you told me what lightning does an what it effects
ReplyDeletefrom vili
I like how you used a lot of wow words . I like that it scares cats.
ReplyDeletemaby you could explan how it sceares cats by William in room 20
Mason I like how you put lots of facts in your story.
ReplyDeleteI also like how your hook out is a question.
Next time maybe you could add some more detail.
from Molly