Purpose: Describe what thunder and
lightning looks like and does.
L.G: Use correct sentences that have capital letters and full stops.
L.G: Use correct sentences that have capital letters and full stops.
The
Lightning
Thunder
is so loud it can make your ear drums bleed. It makes the darkness seem like
its day. The lightning zigzags its way to strike a pole. The lightning looks
like its trying to sidestep the rain as it cracks out of the clouds.
It
shocks things like the lightening wants to want. It stabs the ground like a
knife slicing meat. The lightening burns the tree like a bush fire burning
rubber.
Lightening can be so dangerous. Don’t go outside when there is thunder and lightning!
By
Viliame Rova
Wow Vili - Mum and Dad loved reading your descriptive piece about Thunder and Lightning. Keep up the great work xxxx
ReplyDeleteI like how you used heaps of conjunctions to describe about the lightning.
ReplyDeleteI like how you said it will make your ear drums bleed.
Next time i think that you should describe more about what it looks like.
from Jordan room 20
I like how you have full stops and capital letters. I like how you have talk to the readers. But maybe you could add detail . by Hannah room20
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